Looking for Screenplay Feedback

Hi all,

I've finished work on the second draft of my screenplay titled "The Night Shift" and I'm looking for some feedback on it. Here's sort of a rough plot overview:

What if you could live for eternity?What if you had to spend eternity working in a cemetery whose inhabitants can get a little frisky? Rue Morgan has such a curse. Every night, with his trusted pal Herb, a limbless skeleton, he guards the cemetery, making sure nothing gets in or out. This is one of those nights…

If anyone's interested in taking a look and giving some constructive criticism let me know and I can email you a copy.



sounds really original, are you planning to film it? How? I just instantly had images of a tim burton style animation, all black and purple.